Our sales and service team are full of skating knowledge that is sure to help you get the perfect board you are looking for. If you break your board or anything on it, no problem! We got your back by having all of the equipment you'll need to get you back to skating; we provide grip taping, truck fitting, equipment and if needed a full board assembly service with the purchase of any board or equipment. We have the largest in-house selection of the top skate and long board brands to choose from in the Midwest! To go a long with such an amazing selection we also have incredible skaters here to train you with skating lessons. We can start from the basics like figuring out your stance and learning to balance, all the way to learning advanced tricks like lazerflips (360 heel flip) to dancing on a longboard. Our highly skilled trainers run group lessons for free every first of the month, or paid 1 on 1 sessions at our local skatepark, which is conveniently right next door! So I'm calling all beginners and all veterans to come check out our store and have a skate sesh with us, because we of all people know, "skaters gunna skate."
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Great post Ricky! It really makes me want to come to your shop. However, there are a few minor changes you should consider making. Firstly, you may want to consider including your name in the first paragraph because you reference your last name in the last sentence. Your customers may not understand that "Lovett" is your last name. Secondly, You should consider using more commas in your second paragraph; some of the sentences seem to run on a bit.
ReplyDeletePerfect, thank you for your valuable comments!
DeleteAndrew gave excellent feedback and I agree with everything he wrote.
ReplyDeleteYou provided your readers with a detailed look at your business and truly made a connection because you're obviously passionate. A few grammar errors.